Teleclasses Free Articles Local Seminars in San Diego Writing Products Coaching Info Why Choose Judy Cullins for Coaching Book
Coaching Packages Testimonials about Judy Cullins' Book
Coaching Judy Cullins' Clients Useful Links Archived eMags of The Book Coach Says... The Book Coach Says... FREE eMag Special Offers Discounts of the Month Speakers and Coaches Corner Contact Us Home
Want a quick and simple way to quadruple
your online book and business sales within 4 months?

Viewpoint Or Pov (Point Of View)
By Laraine Anne Barker

There are many different viewpoints from which you can tell your story:


In this viewpoint you can jump into the head of every character. Although omniscient viewpoint is considered the most "natural" one for storytelling, it does pose problems.

a. Because it isn't a good idea to tell a story from too many viewpoints (it can make the reader feel distanced from both the story and the characters) it's best to reveal the thoughts and feelings of minor characters through action and dialogue. However, if this isn't possible, an occasional look into a minor character's head won't be noticed by the reader if it's well handled.

b. In omniscient viewpoint, it's all too easy to change viewpoint in the middle of a paragraph, or even the middle of a sentence. Editors don't like this. Keen-eyed readers notice it too. Critics call it "head-hopping".

Example of viewpoint change in the middle of a sentence/paragraph:
... she could only shout hopelessly as loud as she could, in frustration, expecting no answer. "Lyo!" "What?" he said beside her. Her shout turned into a scream; she seemed to levitate before his eyes. He bent quickly to pick up the mussels she had dropped. She came back down to earth finally and glared at his shaking shoulders.
From The Changeling Sea by Patricia A McKillip

("She seemed to levitate before his eyes" abruptly switches the viewpoint from her to him and is very disconcerting.)


a. First Person:

The main difficulty here is that the narrator can tell the reader only what the "I" character knows. If, to heighten suspense, you want your readers to know that someone is stalking your narrating character, you have to go to great pains to give the narrator some clues and make him less smart than your readers (without annoying them; readers don't like stupid protagonists).

A second problem occurs only in books for children, because the narrating character is nearly always a child and needs to speak with an appropriate voice. This rules out any chance of writing with wisdom or poetic elegance. Even making your character a bookworm and top of the class in English doesn't work very well. You might get away with it if writing "social realism", but fantasy needs special elements of style and wisdom to create that mysterious, indefinable air of magic--elements that you can't use realistically with a child narrator. How would I deal with the problem? Well, I'd probably start the book with a short scene that reminded the now middle-aged narrating character of what happened when he was 11 (or whatever age the character is meant to be) and give him a reason, even if just an overwhelming urge, to write down his story.

b. Second Person:

I've yet to see a whole book written in this viewpoint, but have occasionally seen a paragraph or two something like the following, usually in books written in first person.

"You can't imagine what it's like until it happens to you. It's as if a bomb hits you. You wake up to find the sun streaming through your window when it shouldn't have reached that far. That means you're late for school. And Mr Mitchell's class is first today. He'll be furious. How come your mother forgot to call you? When you rush downstairs you find out. Your father has walked out and your mother is little better than a bawling baby. There's no breakfast ready, no packed lunch waiting for you on the sink bench. You promptly forget Mr Mitchell. Even his worst punishments are nothing compared to this. Perhaps a cup of tea might calm your mother. That's usually what adults suggest when someone's upset. But the kitchen looks as if your parents were throwing things at each other. You have to fight your way through the mess to the kettle."

(In this example, the child narrator has used second person--unconsciously suggested to her by the burst of bitterness that causes her to address the reader directly in the first sentence--in an attempt to distance herself from what she is narrating. This is not happening to HER but to you.)

c. Third Person:

In this viewpoint the story is told almost exclusively through the eyes of the main character. One of the biggest difficulties for beginner writers is STAYING in it. It's all too easy to slip into the omniscient viewpoint without realising. Because of this, beginners are advised NEVER to slip out of third-person limited viewpoint. However, if the break is necessary for the story to work, there's no reason why this rule can't be broken. The story is ALWAYS paramount, particularly in books for children. Just make sure your break doesn't jar (as in the example under Omniscient Viewpoint). In writing for younger children it's particularly important to stay within third person limited viewpoint as much as possible or readers are likely to skip until they find the main character again. (Even worse, they might put your book down and not return to it.)

NEVER break this viewpoint, however, if you're writing category romance. Publishers of this genre DEMAND that you stay in the heroine's viewpoint.

So if, on reading through your completed story, you feel it has an unfocused air, or the main character comes across more as a minor one, then look first for accidental shifts in viewpoint before changing anything else. Fixing these might even be all your story needs.

L A Barker Enterprises
All rights reserved

L A Barker Enterprises.

* You have permission to reprint what you've just read. Use it in your ezine, at your web site or in your newsletter and FREE ebooks. The only requirement is including my by-line, the copyright line and the following footer.

Laraine Anne Barker writes fantasy for young people. Visit her web site, Fantasy for Children & Young Adults, at http://lbarker.orcon.net.nz for FREE stories and novel excerpts. Sign up for the NOVELLA OF THE MONTH CLUB, absolutely FREE!

Send this article to a friend
Your name?
Your email?
Friends name?
Friends email?
Personal message:
"The Book Coach Says... ezine is chock full of useful information - totally worth your time."
Dan Poynter, The Self-Publishing Manual

Subscribe to "The Book Coach Says..."
Write, finish, publish, and market your book. Free tips, articles, and products

Please bookmark our site, we update weekly!

Teleclasses | Free Articles | Seminars | Writing Products | Coaching Info | Why Choose Judy Cullins? | Book Coaching Packages | Archived Ezines | Testimonials | "The Book Coach Says..." FREE eMag | Published Clients | Special Offers | Discounts Of The Month | Useful Links | Contact Us | Home

Judy Cullins, M.A. - [email protected]
7000 Melody Lane - La Mesa, CA 91942 - Ph/Fax:(619) 466-0622 - Orders: 866/200-9743
Designed by: Thomas Le.
2002 Skills Unlimited. All Rights Reserved.